The first call.
The last call.
The circle- the circuit- spliced together- torn apart.
Sometimes we win.
Sometimes we fall.
Always completion,
of a sort.
Hello!
Good-bye?
*Godspeed*
From the heart <>
Don’t cry……
“The Conversation” © 2008 Geraldine H. Hartman
Writer’s Island (Matinee Muse) prompt for April 25, 2008 : Completion
Photo courtesy of: Flickr
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April 25, 2008 at 8:06 pm
paisley
Sometimes we win.
Sometimes we fall.
Always completion,
of a sort.
ever so true,, and win or lose the “prize” is the same…..
April 26, 2008 at 12:52 am
keith hillman
Very neat! Covent Garden if I’m not mistaken
April 26, 2008 at 12:52 am
Tammy
How sad but there is always an ending. Clever!
April 26, 2008 at 1:43 pm
watermaid
‘Hello’ and ‘Goodbye’ are very much a part of my life since my children grew up. Very thought provoking.
April 26, 2008 at 5:00 pm
Billy
Very true. Circuits begun and ended. A part of life. Nice match with the pic
April 26, 2008 at 5:06 pm
Jadey
What a great post. Sometimes we should just take time enjoy the silence on the other end just enjoy knowing someone we care about is on the other line not hurry through the conversation knowing that we only said hi and goodbye
April 26, 2008 at 10:33 pm
Gemma Wiseman
Love your snippets of communication and showing how they maybe even go in never-ending cycles.
Gemma
April 27, 2008 at 1:57 am
Constance
Wow, I love the minimalistic nature of the poem, and that it still packs so much punch! Nicely done.
April 27, 2008 at 10:06 am
Fenny
Less is more fits this piece … very good! Love the picture too
April 27, 2008 at 2:55 pm
Selma
Now that is good. That is really, really good, particularly the part about how even when we fall it’s a completion of sorts. You can write, oh yes!
April 27, 2008 at 5:30 pm
Geraldine
Hi Paisley, A phone call (the important ones at least) are always about completion, aren’t they? I’m a bit puzzled about the “prize” being the same, do tell?
Hi Keith, Welcome. Yes, that’s what the flickr man said LOL. Isn’t flickr a great resource? What a great way to showcase wonderful photos and to share.
Hi Tammy, Thanks, yes there is.
Hi Carole, Isn’t it great we have so many ways to keep in touch; makes it easier to be apart.
Hi Billy, Glad you enjoyed both!
Hi Jadey, Now that is thought-provoking! I need to work at that; sometimes listening comes hard for me.
Hi Gemma, Just what I was trying to convey.
Hi Constance, Ditto for what I said re: Gemma’s comment. Thanks so much.
Hi Fenny, Welcome. Less can be more, can’t it? I’m finding that as I visit writing blogs. Some of my fav reads are very brief and succinct and also very good.
Hi Selma, What a lovely compliment. Thanks so much.
So glad you all could stop in and leave a comment. Thanks so much, G
April 27, 2008 at 10:54 pm
paisley
g- i was expounding on the subject and allowing the phone call to represent life… everything you said here can just as easily be applied to life… and when i read it that first time… and again today… it still is….
April 28, 2008 at 2:56 am
jeques
G,
It is amazing how you were able effectively simplify some complicated thoughts in life in a minimalistic poem with an interesting metaphor that everybody know too well and yes to achieve a certain understanding and enlightenment in the end.
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
April 28, 2008 at 3:02 pm
Rambler
hello/goodbye…what a way to complete.. :)..nicely done
April 29, 2008 at 1:08 pm
jason evans
Very effective, Geraldine! I like the clipped communication.
April 29, 2008 at 3:14 pm
Tumblewords
Perfect! The photo is wonderful and you took the conversation right to it!
April 29, 2008 at 11:30 pm
Geraldine
Hi Paisley, Thanks for stopping by and explaining this a bit more. I appreciate the feedback and insights.
Hi Jeques, That is what I was trying to achieve. Glad I succeeded and this poem rang true for quite a few readers.
Hi Rambler, Thanks so much.
Hi Jason, Glad you enjoyed this one Jason. Sometimes less is more!
Hi Tumblewords, Thanks so much.
Glad you could all stop by. Thanks so much for your visit and comments, G
May 1, 2008 at 5:15 pm
SandyCarlson
“Always completion of a sort” are evocative words for me. So many things are complete yet never quite closed. I like this poem very much.
May 1, 2008 at 6:03 pm
Ruinwen
Thought provoking words, “The circle- the circuit- spliced together- torn apart. ”
May 4, 2008 at 8:58 pm
dianeschuller
those writing prompts are great seeds for creating such a nice variety of thoughts