The first call.
The last call.
The circle- the circuit- spliced together- torn apart.
Sometimes we win.
Sometimes we fall.
Always completion,
of a sort.
Hello!
Good-bye?
*Godspeed*
From the heart <>
Don’t cry……
“The Conversation” © 2008 Geraldine H. Hartman
Writer’s Island (Matinee Muse) prompt for April 25, 2008 : Completion
Photo courtesy of: Flickr
Posted by paisley on April 25, 2008 at 8:06 pm
Sometimes we win.
Sometimes we fall.
Always completion,
of a sort.
ever so true,, and win or lose the “prize” is the same…..
Posted by keith hillman on April 26, 2008 at 12:52 am
Very neat! Covent Garden if I’m not mistaken
Posted by Tammy on April 26, 2008 at 12:52 am
How sad but there is always an ending. Clever!
Posted by watermaid on April 26, 2008 at 1:43 pm
‘Hello’ and ‘Goodbye’ are very much a part of my life since my children grew up. Very thought provoking.
Posted by Billy on April 26, 2008 at 5:00 pm
Very true. Circuits begun and ended. A part of life. Nice match with the pic
Posted by Jadey on April 26, 2008 at 5:06 pm
What a great post. Sometimes we should just take time enjoy the silence on the other end just enjoy knowing someone we care about is on the other line not hurry through the conversation knowing that we only said hi and goodbye
Posted by Gemma Wiseman on April 26, 2008 at 10:33 pm
Love your snippets of communication and showing how they maybe even go in never-ending cycles.
Gemma
Posted by Constance on April 27, 2008 at 1:57 am
Wow, I love the minimalistic nature of the poem, and that it still packs so much punch! Nicely done.
Posted by Fenny on April 27, 2008 at 10:06 am
Less is more fits this piece … very good! Love the picture too
Posted by Selma on April 27, 2008 at 2:55 pm
Now that is good. That is really, really good, particularly the part about how even when we fall it’s a completion of sorts. You can write, oh yes!
Posted by Geraldine on April 27, 2008 at 5:30 pm
Hi Paisley, A phone call (the important ones at least) are always about completion, aren’t they? I’m a bit puzzled about the “prize” being the same, do tell?
Hi Keith, Welcome. Yes, that’s what the flickr man said LOL. Isn’t flickr a great resource? What a great way to showcase wonderful photos and to share.
Hi Tammy, Thanks, yes there is.
Hi Carole, Isn’t it great we have so many ways to keep in touch; makes it easier to be apart.
Hi Billy, Glad you enjoyed both!
Hi Jadey, Now that is thought-provoking! I need to work at that; sometimes listening comes hard for me.
Hi Gemma, Just what I was trying to convey.
Hi Constance, Ditto for what I said re: Gemma’s comment. Thanks so much.
Hi Fenny, Welcome. Less can be more, can’t it? I’m finding that as I visit writing blogs. Some of my fav reads are very brief and succinct and also very good.
Hi Selma, What a lovely compliment. Thanks so much.
So glad you all could stop in and leave a comment. Thanks so much, G
Posted by paisley on April 27, 2008 at 10:54 pm
g- i was expounding on the subject and allowing the phone call to represent life… everything you said here can just as easily be applied to life… and when i read it that first time… and again today… it still is….
Posted by jeques on April 28, 2008 at 2:56 am
G,
It is amazing how you were able effectively simplify some complicated thoughts in life in a minimalistic poem with an interesting metaphor that everybody know too well and yes to achieve a certain understanding and enlightenment in the end.
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
Posted by Rambler on April 28, 2008 at 3:02 pm
hello/goodbye…what a way to complete..
..nicely done
Posted by jason evans on April 29, 2008 at 1:08 pm
Very effective, Geraldine! I like the clipped communication.
Posted by Tumblewords on April 29, 2008 at 3:14 pm
Perfect! The photo is wonderful and you took the conversation right to it!
Posted by Geraldine on April 29, 2008 at 11:30 pm
Hi Paisley, Thanks for stopping by and explaining this a bit more. I appreciate the feedback and insights.
Hi Jeques, That is what I was trying to achieve. Glad I succeeded and this poem rang true for quite a few readers.
Hi Rambler, Thanks so much.
Hi Jason, Glad you enjoyed this one Jason. Sometimes less is more!
Hi Tumblewords, Thanks so much.
Glad you could all stop by. Thanks so much for your visit and comments, G
Posted by SandyCarlson on May 1, 2008 at 5:15 pm
“Always completion of a sort” are evocative words for me. So many things are complete yet never quite closed. I like this poem very much.
Posted by Ruinwen on May 1, 2008 at 6:03 pm
Thought provoking words, “The circle- the circuit- spliced together- torn apart. ”
Posted by dianeschuller on May 4, 2008 at 8:58 pm
those writing prompts are great seeds for creating such a nice variety of thoughts